Okay! I've got some more of my story up! I don't think it is as long as the first one but I split the second chapter into two parts because.....well to be perfectly honest Mom was going on an utter rampage around the house saying that it wasn't clean and all that crap so yeah......I basically had to get off the computer instantly, but I managed to make it to where there was a cliff hanger !

I'll post Part Two up as soon as I get the chance. I'll wait for when my mom is at work, tomorrow ...

Anyway. It would be awsome of people to leave their opinions of my work. Mainly because I'm hoping to turn this into a novel. Maybe not with the same title, and some things should probably be changed around, but other than that I'm really hoping I can make this work. I would love to have other people's oppinions . Just tell me what you like and what you think I should change. I know I need to work on grammar and spelling so don't tell me about that stuff. I would like it if you focused on the general ideas of the story.

All comments are welcome, just....don't hurt me......I know some people won't like at least one thing about the story, but if you really don't like it just say so and tell me what you think I should do to fix it. All of my idea's are open for debate.


Anyway, fans of the story please enjoy and comment! If you do I will give you this --> and a or whatever floats your boat.